Disappearance Writing

WALHT - add detail Success Criteria Self Assessment I will describe using repetition for effect 😀😀😀 I will describe how the character is feeling (emotion) by painting a picture in the reader's mind 😀😀😀 Disappearance.. By Manvi Date: 5.11.19 “Beep beep.” went the clock “argh..it's almost midnight..Mum when is dad gonna get home!” Alice stuttered. She got a hold of the window in her tight tent and pulled through to take a little peek. Tears rolled from her eyes down sliding to her cheeks every second she thought of dad..I begged mum if we could go out and find dad ourselves. We hopped into the jeep and drove away “drip- plop- splat..” went the oil from the jeep, Thoughts kept racing through my head as a meteor hitting earth, Each time I thought, that was a pain in my head..I was getting awfully bored just looking out into the blurred window. I looked in my pocket and i saw i had my Ba-xi! I screeched in joy. I started to play, and then I got more bored of playing and had totally forgotten about Brad! Brad was a character I had made he tells me where to go and I asked “Hey Brad what way?” I giggled as a joke he told us “right..” saying in a robot ancient voice as an opinion..i never knew he talked I told mum right and i saw so many wild flowers..i took a photo of each flower, “Mum mum!! It's almost midnight where is he!” I wanted to scream I almost started to cry i had missed dad very much he always goes to trips without us..i had no sisters or brothers i was only ten years old..I wasn't prepared to lose my dad. We sent him photos of the fierce flowers to let him know we are on the way. “What type of reception is this? It a bad idea to send him pictures he probably can't even see and he won't notice..” We reached a strange looking dessert or something, As i said i never wanted to lose my dad and I wasnt even ready or prepared. We saw something in the corner of my eye I said “MUM LOOK THERES A CAR!” but it wasn't dad..I started to sob. 5 minutes later we saw another car I hurtled out of my seatbelt and leaned over to see ...A car just like dad’s!! I felt light headed with so much relief, I went over ran over to dad and gave him a huge hug.. The End :)